What do you think?

honestly answer how you feel about this poem



Summer Is Ours;

ashes to ashes to ashes to rain

you feel no, i feel no, we feel no pain

with a chill you are here

with a tear you are gone

flowers die with autumn

race the frosty dawn

kiss me, kiss me

you once said

to you, to me, we are both dead

with the first day of winter makes us corpses in the ground

snow layering our graves along with everything else around

one cocoon hatches with colorful on green

spring, my darling. yes, spring

a weed blooms

it heals my heart

the third season unravels when everything falls apart

as the butterfly flutters back into the summer rain

you feel no, i feel no, we feel no pain







p.s. im not emo XD

What do you think?
Nice rhythm. Interesting lines:



kiss me, kiss me

you once said

to you, to me, we are both dead



Makes one wonder about "dead" Oooh yes, in winter!

very good poem. keep writing more.
Reply:honestly, you are really good at writing, the imagery is great

augmon