[♥]I'm only 14, not a professional, and I had to write a sonnet for English!?

Summertime exudes the brightness of the sun.

Blooms flowers; numerous colors different in tint.

The heat emits from the heat waves, making eyes squint.

Until the pursuit of the dog days are done.



Then, arrives the winter, when the sun shelters its glow.

Leaves falling, running away from the oaks.

The artic breeze, causing people to wear heavy coats.

As they ramble on the gloomy, dull, peaceful streets of snow.



Winter, when the cheerful mood of summer goes

Away and everything looses some spark.

When the sky alternates from bright blue to gray and dark.

Summer, when butterflies aviate and green leaves grow.



Winter, briskness and glee are what it clearly seems to lack.

Until the summer comes along again, briefly bringing it back.





What should I change???? I'm not too fond of writing poetry and some people answered saying that it sucked, so yeah, that's why.

[?]I'm only 14, not a professional, and I had to write a sonnet for English!?
I think this is a great attempt at a sonnet. Even though others have listed what the requirements are for a sonnet I don't think teacher will care too much if the rhyming or syllable count is off. Most of your lines are twelve syllables long. I also wouldn't worry about using iambic pentameter *cringes,* it's somewhat confusing. An iambic foot consists of an unstressed syllable and a stressed syllable. So, there are five iambic feet in pentameter.





Edit: The rhyme scheme seems to be a mix of the English/Shakespearean sonnet and the Italian sonnet. The Italian sonnet is: abba abba cded ce. The Spenserian sonnet has a rhyme scheme of: abab, bcbc, cdcd, ee.
Reply:Thats really Pretty!!
Reply:^^change your form as above. However you edit- imo keep these lines!



"Until the pursuit of the dog days are done"



"Then, arrives the winter, when the sun shelters its glow"



"As they ramble on the gloomy, dull, peaceful streets of snow"



"Winter, when the cheerful mood of summer goes"



"when butterflies aviate" seems a bit awkward- play around with it- this is a great poem and if you play with it and put some more thought and feeling- it could be so rewarding you may suddenly find you enjoy writing!
Reply:it is a great POEM. But sorry that is NOT a sonnet.

Sonnets are fourteen lines and follow iambic pentameter.

Which means every other line rhymes and the last two rhyme. In a sonnet has ten syllables per line.

a

b

a

b



c

d

c

d



e

f

e

f



g

g
Reply:nice poem, but rhyme format is incorrect

sonnet should rhyme as

a

b

a

b



c

d

c

d



e

f

e

f



g

g
Reply:In my opinion it's beautiful .