What do you think of this poem I wrote?

A Year





Autumn breezes with fallen leaves on the ground,

She whispers she loves me, my heart unwound,

I hold her close, can't live without her touch,

She goes to college, leaving me with not much.



Winter arrives, snow breezes and chills my breath,

Without her, the days and nights seem so long,

I hear her voice, wanting to see her today,

I close my eyes and remember yesterday.



Spring comes, the scent of flowers reminds me of her,

They say I shouldn't trust, thoughts of us a blur,

If she's with me in the end, I'll take the chance,

We can stand up to the test, not laying our love to rest.



Summer takes so long to come, waiting for her plane,

Life's empty without her, something I can not explain,

I see her, my heart and soul begins to stir,

The best day of my life, is any day I spend with her.

What do you think of this poem I wrote?
AWWWWW. That's the sweetest poem I have ever read! You mst really love the girl you wrote this for.
Reply:umm.... ever think of publishing?

seriously it was amazing... the sweetest thing i've ever read!

i think we should date!! haha. jk. jk.
Reply:Lol the poem is good only i thot the line " she goes to college, leaving me with not much " absurd.... coz it sounds like ur telling a story at this line...that wat i felt umm on a whole the poem is good but is kinda abrupt changing the scene and thus jerky.



But still a good one.
Reply:Why are you asking us? Maybe you should have her read it first.



Otherwise its a nice poem.
Reply:really sweet
Reply:that's really great job
Reply:Wow, nice poem.God luck!!!
Reply:wow...u poem is so good...
Reply:wow thats really nice
Reply:beautiful.