What do you think of this poem??

Snow melts,

Revealing hidden treasures and leaves left behind,

Reminding us of the fond memories of the long golden roads of fall.

New life. New beginning. Much like the sprouting blossoms of determined tree’s and flowers alike. Something in the air: infectious, airborne joy filling every corner of sunlight. Shrinking away the darkness for another day to come. Think only of the current warmness of spring, for the current moment is all we have. Nothing more.

Birds now chirping. Awaking the ever longing stillness and lifelessness of winter, releasing new energies and foreshadowing the eventuality of the coming summer, just around the corner.



i sent this in to the school newspaper and i hope its guna b in there (im 13 btw) and no, i didnt copy any of this from somewhere

What do you think of this poem??
Wow! Blew me away! One thing, though, you should do, is edit it. Sometimes, instead of putting sentences together, you could for example instead of "New life. New beginning. Much like the..." you could make it:

"New life.

New beginning.

Much like the..."

Because that way it's more abstract and isn't much on a reader's eye. A poem is a poem when a line is 9 words or less. That way it's easier to read and looks like a poem. That way it looks more like a passage than one.

But it's good! Keep it the way it is!

Beautiful
Reply:nice poem buddy

i actually felt like it was spring around me

all the warm feelings just overcame me

despite the fact that its winter where i am

its really cold outside

if only spring can last forever
Reply:i like it