Help me with my poem please?

here is a poem i just revised tell me what you think



The Seasons of Time



Winter time has come and passed

Seems like it has gone to fast

The snow has melted

The family is gone

I feel lke it hasn’t been that long



Wait one second

Let me catch my breath

Give me some time

To be with the rest



I need some more

More time to be

A part of the family

Before they leave

Leave for planes

And long car rides too

Since the holiday season is long ******* ( I NED HELP WITH THIS WORD IT MUST MEAN GONE OR SOMTHING LIKE THAT )



It's coming up

Up so fast

I cant believe it

Summer time

Is almost here

The showers are coming

The flowers are blooming

And in the stores

Swimsuits are selling



I just cant grasp

How fast time can come and go

Before I know it, once more a season will go



When you close your eyes

It’s a new day and time



The seasons come

And the seasons go

But it’s the way you spend them

That stays with you forever



please give me some advice on this poem shorter longer word changes anything to improve it

Help me with my poem please?
"Long is Holiday and it passes so quick".



That's my suggestion, it cut's down on length. Yet passes desired info
Reply:I thought that it was good how it was. Good poem.

I enjoyed its sound and its message.
Reply:If I may.... ....as you have inspired me



The Seasons of Time



Winter time has come and passed

Seems like it has gone too fast

The snow has melted The family gone

I feel lke it hasn’t been that long



Wait one second Let me catch my breath

Give me some time To be the best

Arms wide through endless time let me keep

this momments dream.



As the seasons turn and sigh from a land all dressed in white

as clouds shed their tears off joy seeds awaken and spread

their wings for the busy bumble bee

in a glimmer off an eye I cant believe its Summer time



like a swarm keen to shed our winters skin

Swimsuits bright all selling by nite

How fast time has come and gone



in a blink off an eye It’s a new day and time

seasons come and seasons go

leaving memories forever



does this help any....?
Reply:My advice is that you abandon this poem completely. It's totally rubbish, has no rhythm, says nothing that hasn't been said before and more eloquently by other people, and is in general a total waste of your time and ours.
Reply:How about for the first verse



Winter time has come and passed

Seems like it is gone too fast

The snow has melted

The family gone

Has it really been that long?



A few ideas for Third Verse



I need more time to be a part

And haste it only stirs my heart

To wish for more now that they're gone

Makes other seasons feel too long



Of course it's your poem so you should make it what you want. I just feel since you've chosen to rhyme in your verse you need to choose words that flow and fit with your rythmn and rhyme. I would keep each verse following a similar form to your first verse. Good luck and keep it up!