What do you think of these poems?

OK, here they are, and, as usual, they do not rhyme:



1: (Alone)



There is a place where I can hide

Deep inside my heart

A place where there are no troubles

No problems or frustrations

I can be me and no one cares

And I can cry and scream

This is the place where I can be

That no one else knows

Sometimes it gets lonely

But I don’t care

For loneliness is safety

I laugh at those who say

Safety is with numbers

For the only true safety

From any form of pain

Is to be utterly

Absolutely

And totally

Alone



2: (The Rose Alone)

The rose alone

In an eggshell world

Doing as it’s told

Freedom a distant illusion

Alone

And yet

Not so

A lone figure

Of fire

Taking her by the hand

Destroying the thorns

And leading her to

A new world

All their own



3: (Darkness)



Stuck in a darkness

Of my own creation

The truth seems too far to touch

The darkness envelopes

And kills all the flowers

And the rose petals

Melt in the snow



Plz tell me what u think!

What do you think of these poems?
loads of feelings , thoughts and emotions and alot of depth

as in following lines:



Deep inside my heart

A place where there are no troubles

No problems or frustrations

I can be me and no one cares

And I can cry and scream
Reply:# 2 I liked. Eggshell world, excellent metaphor.
Reply:i wonder at your being taught to read and "write" at all.

that time could have been put to better use watering the garden

or feeding the cat

shamooing the carpets perhaps.

or putting you to work in the salt mines.

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