Critque plz?????????

this is my poem and i wanna kno what u think.



As my tears fall down

like atumn leaves

deep inside

my soul grieves



As the clouds roll by

and time goes on

I wonder when the sun will rise

and the sunlight shall dawn



I feel so cold

like mid-winter snow

I miss the Spring

and watching the flowers grow



I kno not when the weather changed

or why it happened this way

All i have to hope for

Is the sunlight bringing a new day

Critque plz?????????
That's really great! Just work a little on the rhythm.
Reply:well, sounds a sad poem about hope. you may rethink the imagery such as "my tears fall down

like atumn leaves" tears dropping? and spelling of autumn.

It may be fashionable but I'd prefer "know" to "kno".

Overall I think you have ample potential to compose very moving poems! well done.

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Reply:on a scale of 1 -10 (and 10 being good) i would say and good

solid 9 to 9,5 .