Do you like my poem?

I will Miss Life





The trees are still growing

Every year it keeps on snowing

The Birds are still flying

But I am dying



The flowers in the ground

The sunshine all around

The holidays I adore

The countries I’ll never explore



The Happy children’s faces

The changing of the places

The vast new technology

Which I will never see



The rising of the dawn

My friends who came to mourn

My treasured memory

My final prayer to thee



If I die before I wake

I pray the lord my soul do take

Do you like my poem?
I really loved it.So sad but so meaningful.It s real the same way I write.It s beautiful and fragile all at once.Thanks for sharing.
Reply:its very basic and follows a very predictable and repetitive rhyming scheme
Reply:it's good, The final verse is a bit generic... but it works well with the poem.
Reply:it is grate and your emotions really show though it does seem like you are living in a chell and the inside is dieing hope for the best
Reply:Stanza's 2 %26amp; 3 don't seem to fit.
Reply:the first and the second part..........are just fantastic

the rest of it is very good.........but i liked most the first and the second part
Reply:master p lyrics
Reply:It's a tragic beauty! It communicates with the senses exceptionally well, and makes the reader feel like you are feeling...contemplative. Very nice! If the reader draws that much emotion from it, then you are a poet...and I genuinely hope that you know it! Keep on writing! You have the potential and talent to be given great success!



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Reply:It`s a nice poem actually.Only ghoulish!Sounded really profound until you mentioned technology.It`s a good style though - juxtaposing happiness and brightness with gloom and doom!
Reply:Very touching!
Reply:i think it is good.
Reply:Dear little Jodie, thanks for your beautiful poem, My dear child keep at it' [who knows] bye for now Uncle Denis xx
Reply:It is lovely, but sad
Reply:so... you are dead then?
Reply:Like it!....

somehow, it feels so lonely......

like that you just standing, while everything goes.....

you just kept waiting....for I believe everybody does....

arenas